O Holy Hello pg. 4

The sequencing here is better, definately. But the introduction of the stranger doesn't hold as much weight as it seems it should. She just kinda... appears there, like she's going PEEK-A-BOO! If this is what led to angels falling, then I think a better intro is needed. At least a frame to establish the stranger's presence as something important. I think a better way to introduce her would be to have a panel showing the angels in the library looking in a direction, and in that direction, have a smaller panel with a close-up of the stranger's face. Messy hair, a devious grin, pointed ears, and unexposed eyes make this figure look worrying, especially with the reactions of the other characters (I especially like Balberith's lower lip ). A single panel close up would show that this person is important, as opposed to "oh look a stranger in heaven."